Experiment 44
In the Second World of War, when Germany was defeated there was a base in Berlin the reason why the Red Army wanted to invade Germany to take control of the base. But something went wrong ...
Part 1: Devil's Crib
Berlin, 1945
" Alfa Six you copy me!" said Vladiv the commander of the Russian squad, Yes I copy you, how are things there? Well If you can see we are in the middle of nowhere, but we can survive there are only dead soldiers and dust. Understood hold in there wait for the rescue and do not leave your position. In the night 7pm the squad made a camp to spend the night. There were 4 soldiers in the squad Vladiv, a tall man with brown hair and blue eyes, Dimitri better to say the "joker" of the squad a man bold with black eyes and a dragon tattoo on his face, Rovco the scientist and medic of the squad a man with yellow hair and green eyes and the last one "Oborot" he is a weird and silent one we just have him in the squad because he is a good shooter, Oborot have black hair , grey eyes and a scar covering his right eye.

"Alfa Six do you copy me? a few seconds in silence... " Yes Vladiv hear this you all are in danger leave that zone now run to the building in the northeast , at least the radiation will kill you in a few days in that place. On the building. What the hell is going on! Rovco said, I thought the war in the East of Berlin was over. Dimitri said. " Alfa Six waiting for your response" Vladiv said. Nothing the signal is dead. Vladiv said. Oborot started to laugh, Dimitri looked at him " You think this is a joke!". Oborot laugthed again . " Look at me when I am talking to you clown!!" Dimitri said to Oborot. Hey guys all of you seriously calm down. Vladiv started to walk in the place while the group stayed fighthing. Vladiv saw something very weird he saw the same animal that he saw in his dream, he felt a strange feeling inside.
When he closed his eyes and opened them again there was no animal, there was just a box in the floor. When Vladiv opened the box there was a note he opened the note and in the note there was wrote, " Life is to short and to disgusting like the animal you saw". Vladiv was scared he threw the box to the floor and went back to the group. We should find another exit I bet this is some kind of abandoned bunker. Yeah I am agreed I don't want to die in a crazy Nazi hideout. Dimitri said while he drinked his vodka. Ok there are two big hallways here Dimitri and me will go to this one Oborot and you will go to the other. Yes Sir they all said. Dimitri said , " Man I don't like that fool of Oborot he just make me creeps" Vladiv smilled , He is a good shooter that's why we have him. Dimitri changed the subject " Dam I miss my girl's ass " Dimitri said showing me a picture of her making sexy posses, Vladiv chuckled " Yeah she is very hot , will you share her with me" Vladiv said laughthing
" Well I bet she will not like what you have there" Dimitri said laughthing . You mother... [ Screams and 3 shoots were heard by Dimitri and Vladiv.] What was that Vladiv said. Shit that is not a human scream Dimitri said. We reloaded our rifles, " Springfield Rifles they have the capacity of blow a bear chest with just 2 shoots". Vladiv said , Amen to that Dimitri said. They ran through the desolate and dark hallway . Shit man I cannot see nothing here , lets see if we can find an exit. After running and running we found Oborot and Rovco , Oborot was standing up pointing with his rifles in the inmense darkness that invaded this place. And Rovco was in his knees investigating a dead corpse What the heck is that? Dimitri said, I don't know but there is something that isn't right about this place.

Guys I saw a animal and a note just when we were in the entrance and The strange animal disappeared it was so weird , the group readed the note they were starting to get nervous. [ A scream and a door smack was heard] What is that? Dimitri said , lets hide guys it will be the best we can do, But we have guns and bulets Vladiv said The army pay us for killing germans not fricking mutants and if you want to fight them great but you are alone! Rovco said Vladiv looked at Dimitri . Sorry Vlad but he is right. Dimitri said. They all hided , Vladiv hided himself in the closet. We can hear the mutants groaning and making noise all the way through here. Dimitri bottle of whiskey fell in the floor, Oh Shit!!! Dimitri said, all the mutants started to attack Dimitri by biting him and torturing him in an inmaginable way. A tear sliced through my eye because they killed him in my face but I could not do anything because they were like 18 mutants or more I don't remember.
But Rovco make me a sign and Vladiv make the order when the mutants were leaving the room we opened fire and killed them but one tried to bite Vladiv but Vladiv punched him and after that he crushed the mutan t skull with a rock that he found in the floor. I saw Dimitri in the floor drowning in blood. He told me " Take out my pain brother"... I will Brother I will... A tear sliced in my face again and I shooted him in the head." Dimitri gone but not forgetten" Rovco said , Oborot was just looking at the body with a cold look he turned on a cigar and keep watching , I was judging him in my mind he was enjoying the moment he seemed to be laughthing inside of his dam mind... I found a map of the place, Rovco said , Good , lead the way , Vladiv said while he was saying a last goodbye to him. The 3 soldiers found the Chemical Lab , " Chemical lab room #o5 Project ZL . This doesn't feel good in the years 30 I worked as a scientist in a ZL room they all did experiments with humans and animals . Rovco said. Hey look at this room all the rooms and beds were empty except one that contained a light turned on and a machine to breath . Strange, this machines are used with babies that are born early. And they all saw a horrible scene 10 babies desfigurated and deformed without skin eating each other bodies. After that a radio turned on with a classic jazz song and the lights turned on .
when the lights turned on you could see that all the mutants were in the roof like bats and the light scared them they started fliying around and triying to kill us but we started shooting I took down 6 of them , Rovco 1 and Oborot 5. They kept arriving and we started to run, when we thought that we had escaped them the lights started to turn off and on very quick that make that creatures more dangerous the " Light". One of them bit me and I shoot at his face and we all start running again. Look an exit!!!! Vladiv said . We escaped of that insane place. " This is a WASTELAND"... Rovco said. We saw a desolated and " wasted-up" environment. It seems like a post-apocalyptic zone . After that Oborot spoke " This is the other portal shit we are so screwed, this is the portal that shows us what will had happened if Germany had won the war , in this portal they won.
. What are you talking about and where the hell are we?! Vladiv shout to Oborot. Oborot started to laugh . I am tired of that fucking laugh I am going to bring you down!!! Vladiv started to punch Oborot he got mad he threw Vladiv to the floor and pointed his knife in Vladiv neck, Come on do it, do it you scumbag !!! Vladiv screamed . Stop!!! Rovco screamed and shooted with his gun in the air. We will take care of this later... Vladiv said.. They keep walking and there was destroyed houses , gray smoke in the air and the green skies. The radiation was making us crazy. Hey guys lets spend the night in that gas station we were so tired and we were losing the hope that we will survive, Rovco was the most optimistic of the 3 of us. In middle night I woke up because I heard a scream outside.
I went outside the gas station the zone was completely dark and cold. I turned on my lighter and I found a mutant without one leg I started to laugh I spited on his face and started to kick him " Do you like this piece of scum !!! Vladiv screamed, he seemed to be enjoying the moment. He stopped when he realized that he has destroyed the mutant skull, when Vladiv turned back someone hit him in the face and he fell down. Hours later... Vladiv was chained in a triangular cell that seemed to be in the top of a pyramid . Where am I? Vladiv said in a very low voice. When he saw the zone it was exactly like the dream there was a pyramid ,a bunch of people with black robs amd that strange animal. The bombs fell down and he was scared he thought that he will die but when the explosion caused by the bomb almost burned his skin something happened, Vladiv appeared in other place, it seemed to be like an Nazi general office. The room was dark, full of dead people, after that lights turned on the bodies dessapeared and the room was like new, like nothing happened there.
Someone told him in a cold and sad voice " Come In ..." He sat on the chair and there was a German general, the president of project ZL , my name is Fran Schur , president of project ZL. " what do you want from me"? Vladiv asked. " Your help " Said Fran Schur , why in this fucking earth will I help a Nazi ? Ok , Ya, Ya I am a Nazi but I didn't knew that Hitler will use this power with civilians I am not that bad, but if you want to change the portal and save the world you should hear me. Ok, said Vladiv , there is the entrance of hell in the Schevakiskan Metro and if you destroy the portal of hell everything will come to normality why are you doing this Fran? Vladiv asked. " I guess that long ago I had a daughter called " Sarifa" and she died of cause of the ZL. He said in a sad voice. " Now is time to go" Fran said. Wait !!! I screamed . I was back in that strange office the room was dark again and there was a dead body in the desk where Fran was seated I think that he is a ghost. Vladiv had only one main idea in mind " Get the f*** out of that place".
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I thought it was a good creepypasta but it had too many grammar and punctuation mistakes. Also, you should know that when you're writing something for school it should not have any swear words. Even Miss Bea said it shouldn't have curse words. I suggest you edit them ASAP because you can get in trouble. I also think that the part about Dimitri's girl friend's "a**" was not necessary at all. I can see you used it to give the story some humor but I just don't think that was necessary, plus It isn't appropriate for school (I also don't think it's funny. It's a pretty lame and offensive joke). Honestly I think it's a good creepypasta but it's not the kind of thing you should write for school because like I said before It is not appropriate.
ReplyDeleteI can't believe I'm the only one who commented. Ya'll better start takin' Ms. Bea's class seriously I'm not even kidding.
ReplyDeleteIt's a really great story, but I agree with whoever twiinCaptor is. You should cut back o the swear words and on the offensive and unnecessary language. Other than that it was pretty good, but i have a few questions... Who or what is ZL? And is this being narrated in first person or in third person? I'm confused...
ReplyDeletetrue, btw twiinCaptor's fefi
DeleteI agree with both, Cristina and twiinCaptor. There are a lot of grammar mistakes and in some parts you tell the story in past tense and in other in present tense. Also, you should cut out the unnecessary words and offensive jokes. Other than that the story was really good.
ReplyDeleteThe line is fine (story line, I mean) although some parts are not typically the best level of appropriate, as this is for a class.
ReplyDeleteNice story, harsh swearing.
ReplyDeleteIt was an interesting story and quite creepy... But there were swear words in it and I would change them to say other things instead of swear words...
ReplyDeleteIt was a nice story, but those swear words are inappropriate for school.
ReplyDeleteI like it, but plz cut down the swearing xP
ReplyDeleteI didn't understand what was going on.
ReplyDeletehahaha bea... me either
Deletereally cool story. i really liked it :) scary though.
ReplyDeleteOMG AWESOME STORY!!!
ReplyDeleteit also has alot of harsh swearing...
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ReplyDeleteHowever, you need to edit it. It has a lot of grammar mistakes, and was not appropriate for school. It had a lot of swear words...please edit those out (the swear words), and change them for other words.....
ReplyDeleteI liked the story it was good but scary!!! It gave me the creeps! I don't think you are allowed to write swear words but everything else was good.
ReplyDeletei liked it! it was scary... but cool! u should prob change the swearing words to something else :/ but over all very creepy pastaish
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